Friday Fictioneers: Fiona

Posted: August 3, 2012 in Friday Fictioneers
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grapevine gore, Madison Woods

“Is nothing sacred?” Fiona cried.

She pulled her apron off as she ran to the vine.  She knelt, wiped the slime from the gash.  It was too late.  Infection always hung in the air, waiting for a break in the skin.  She watched it flow through the sapline, turning the vine black.  This had been her one responsibility in the Community.  Damon had witnessed the defilement and  run off to inform the Committee.

The blackness reached the ground; she turned to her son.  His toy sword trailed in the dust.

“Everything will be okay,” she lied as she held him.

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Hope you enjoyed my 100-word story.  I love comments and critique.  Read more great stories or add one of your own at “Friday Fictioneers” on Madison Woods’ website.

 
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Comments
  1. Sandra says:

    Not sure what’s more threatening, the goo or the community. A nice take on the prompt.

  2. Hi Keli,
    This story has a dark cultish setting, and you create enough tension to make up worry about the fate of the boy. Nice tale!
    Ron

  3. Brian Benoit says:

    This was really nicely done. The characters sketched in, with the ominous Community looming and whatever this infection is threatening as well. I loved how you ended it!

    Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/08/03/the-lifeblood-of-the-paiik-tree/)

  4. elmowrites says:

    You pack a lot into these few words – I’m afraid of the goo and the consequences with the community. Where did this come from? What’s going to happen to her and the family? I love the tender scene with the son too – great contrast there.
    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/08/03/friday-fiction-torment/

  5. billgncs says:

    i really liked the line ” this had been her one responsibility “, it made the infection so significant to her.

  6. rochellewisoff says:

    Something sinister on the horizon. She lied…of course she did and we know it.
    http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/08/wild-life.html

  7. Trudy says:

    As a parent, you really feel for her. I’m very worried about what could happen next. Lovely story.

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